Maplestory-story 2

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Once again im totaly BORED so i decided to write the part 2 to my story Please note that im only a pri4 girl so pls
dont scold me if i have spelling mistakes .(if you didnt read the first one,dont bother reading this)

Diana spun around.A woman dressed in red robes was standing before me.”Who are you?”Diana asked curiously.
“Me?my name is Mai”said the woman.She added”and congrats on killing that snail!ive never seen a finer first attempt in a long time!”she said.Diana asked” Have you been followi-“However,the woman interupted”How about you meet me here same day same time?I can train you….”She added thoughtfully.”i dont know….”replied Diana.However,the woman
said “Great!meet you next week!”

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For the next few days,Diana thought about the training that Mai had promised her and fretted.She-

SORRY END OF THIS BLOG.CHECK OUT THE CONTINUING STORY!(maybe tomorrow ill make it )

10 thoughts on “Maplestory-story 2”

  3. Not a bad attempt . You may want to type it in Mircosoft Words first to remove any errors :]

  4. repty said: “Not a bad attempt . You may want to type it in Mircosoft Words first to remove any errors :]”

    Uh huh, listen to Big Sister Repty. ;D

    And seriously, your two parts should be placed on one blog. It’s not too bad (for your standard, though I’ve seen better) ‘cept for the lack of spacing and spelling errors. And the brevity of it makes it choppy. :/

  10. I just have to say something.

    If anything, ANYTHING when you’re writing, keep in mind your perspective. It’s okay if your english isn’t so hot, or if you can’t spell for crap.

    Diana spun around.A woman dressed in red robes was standing before her.“Who are you?”Diana asked curiously.

    Since it is from Dana’s perspective, in a third person, you shouldn’t change it to first person with the word ‘me’. Always make sure to stay in perspective!
    Good luck!

    ~Mip

    (I continued reading, hoping it would get interesting, and, it just stopped. Way to freakin’ short. A paragraph does NOT equal a chapter. )

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