Jake and Koa left the house as soon as possible and headed on another ship. They read and they were headed for Puff Island, They needed to go to Cloud Park and Go to Puff Station So they went
Jake-Here Cloud Park!
Koa-Hmm wheres the station?
Jake-I dunno
Koa-Theres a lady right there lets ask her
Jake-Hello wheres Puff station?
???-Oh you need the Cloud Fairy to teleport you there
Jake-Wheres that?
???-Over there
Jake-Thank you Whats your name
???-Its Omi
Jake-thanks omi
Omi-No problem
Koa getting jealous of attention, He teleported him and Jake next to the Cloud Fairy
Koa-Take us to Puff Station
Cloud Fairy-Sure but you need to do me a favor
Koa-Sure what is it?
Cloud Fairy i need my Moonlight wand back a Behemoth stole it.
Koa-Where is the behemoth
Cloud fairy-There in that cave
Koa and Jake ran into the cave and searched, Until a behemoth baby attacked them. Koa froze it and shocked it to death. That lured the Mom
Behemoth-ROAR!!!
Koa and Jake Fought it Koa zapped it with flashing thunder! and then froze it! Jake used a skill called hyper body which made them strong! Jake used Power Strike and a powerful blow it was it destroyed the behemoth whole.
Koa and Jake ran to the corner and got the Moonlight weapon, As they were exiting a figure was standing in front of them
???-Drop dead!
Koa-Wha?
Jake-Hu?
???-My name is Telestor part of the guild
Jake-I must kill you!
Koa-What do you mean/?
Jake-His boss killed my parents!
Koa-Oh, ill help!
Jake was anger and anger was turning to power
Teles-Haha!
Jake used a powerful power strike which sent teles flying and quickly killed him
Jake had no power left because he used a strong and powerful attack his father thought him before he died it was called Tiger Strike
—Lab—
Telestor has been defeated BZZZ Changing power into the lords body!
–Cave–
Koa-You okay?
Jake-Yes(faints)
3 Hours later
Jake woke up on a ship to PUff island and next to him was Koa
He was going to as Koa to be his Girlfriend
Jake-Hey Koa
Koa-Yeah
Jake-We known each other for a while now and..
Koa-Yes?
Jake-Will you be my Girlfriend?
Koa-Uhmm
15Mins later
Koa-hmmmm
Jake- Well?
Koa-Sure
To Be Continued….
Read previous storys or you won`t understand much
nice, but a lot of dialogue. you need to describe the scenery more. and teh speech more.
HAnd hurts and ok Onto PUFf island!
Um,
too much dialogue, as JesusFreak said
Also, you have atrocious grammar
i thought koa is a boy or is he/she a girl?O.o
Girl! and i know i type to fast so i get spelling mistakes
use colons “:” instead of hyphens
xD read starting from number 1 and you will figure it out. Victor good job xD