uhhh hi im new at this =) so please tell me what i shoudl improve on xP dont yell at me cause this is my first time

i charged at the ligators and screamed out “SLASH BLAST” at that point i had finally killed the group of 5 ligators. They were indeed strong for me because i didnt have much accuracy. we all gave in our passes to the leader and we got onto the next stage. we had passed the first test. me and my 3 friends were happily doing second stage when all of a sudden… A KING SLIME HAD APPEARED OUT OF NOWHERE we couldhave easily taken it down but then it had a evil grin on its face and used his special skill earthquake. It had cracked the floor in the pq 2 of my friend dropped to there doom. the only survivors were me and my friend andy. unfortanetly for us we were both warriors. we were at a huge disadvantage. we needed a plan but because of andys very low int he ran towards the king slime slashing like a madman. the slime dodged it easily without a scratch. he then jumped on top of andy. he was now a goner and i was the sole survivor…..

to be continued…

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