The boy was lucky; it was as simple as that. Even as early as his adventures on Maple Island, others noticed it. Once, while fatigued from a days training, an orange mushroom got by his dagger. It seemed like the end had arrived before he had even gotten chance to begin. He tried to dodge the impending attack, but tripped on a box* that seemed to appear out of thin air. He watched from the ground, expecting the worse, but instead of being stomped to death by the orange monstrosity, it sailed over his head. Not believing his luck, he quickly got to his feet and scampered out of the mushrooms range. A few fellow beginners stared at him, not sure whether to laugh or to applaud. I cant let this mushroom go in front of this crowd, he thought. He charged back at it, fruit dagger gleaming, and swiftly finished it. He picked up the mushroom cap casually, the group now watching his every move, and strode back to town. The boy was lucky; it was as simple as that.
*From the quest that now gives the relaxer.
If you liked it (show this by clicking the button), I’ll write more. I’m just trying to see if it’s even worth it to make a fan fic.
AGAIN, this is just to see if you liked it, I realize it’s short. I figured, why write two pages in word if no one’s going to like it. Look at it as a debut CD with only 3 or 4 songs on it.
I really like your style of writing! And I don’t say that to everyone you know o.o
it is kewl, lol! try adn write more!
^_^~sellsword
I love the title.
Its catchy and original.
Semicolons! SEMICOLONS! HOLY ASJF;AIEJFA! *clicks like button*
Good job – you described everything excellently. Not too little, but not over the top either. Maybe try making it a little bit longer?
Well, good for him, Avoid making ones about beginer island, they arn’t very exciting
i give u props, not many can make a story about maple island and pull it off, i must say, u did it
Good job – you described everything excellently. Not too little, but not over the top either. Maybe try making it a little bit longer?”
Yeah, I was just trying to see if you guys liked the concept before I continued, so yes, the next will be longer.
By the way, semicolons ftw! (only when used correctly of course)
@sirsolo: Do you avoid the beginning of the story because it generally tends to be slower than the rest? No. It introduces the character and gives background. Just because Maple Island isn’t the coolest place doesn’t make it unimportant. Besides, it ties in to the rest of the story. A new addition will come tomorrow or late tonight most likely; I’ve got homework.
Good for a pilot, all pilots are boring, seriously, no matter HOW good the show, the pilot is bound to be boring.
Yours, though short, was close to being good, a very straight-foward thing, make it longer, so you can hook people more easily.
you are a great writer and i liked the story but i would like to read some that arent about maple island, but other than that it was great.
hmm?the title’s catchy? I was just zooming around and looked at every blog. Lol,I even went to the blogs that had titles that were NOT catchy
TF ftw!111!