The Lone One :: A Story [Prologue]

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Starting tomorrow, I will be launching weekly chapters to a story I am currently writing, entitled: The Lone One :: A Story. Hope you enjoy them.

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The Lone One :: A Story
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PROLOGUE

When I was a child, there came many difficulties, deciding if to do something or not; and afterwards, meeting the consequences. The greatest challenge that continues to face children is learning when to act like a child and when it’s necessary to become an adult. Questions of maturity and responsibility confront children every day, and the answers are not as black or white as they would like. Yet, the real problem for children indeed is, in fact, knowing when they must “grow up.” Though I do not realize why or how situations like those will take place for me; when or what will happen; one thing is for certain: the choices we make will have a massive impact on the rest of our lives, despite how small or large.

Thoughts came rushing through my mind. What should I DO? What should I SAY? Standing there erectly, I stared at him and bent my head down. Beads of sweat rapidly crawled through my hair and slid slowly down my head. Bending my head down, I frowned in despair.

“Answer me, Kareshi. Please,” Mochebun quietly spoke.

Hesitating, I took a deep breath. Trying to steady myself into the flow of words, I answered in a simple tone.

“Mochebun,” I sighed, “from the day I met you when I was lost in the forest; the moment I gave you the amulet in return; I thought I did. But it was as a kid. I didn’t know it would come this far.”

I tilted my head back up, our eyes meeting. “I’m sorry, but I’ve made my choice – Rakerisimi,” I said as I walked away, the dress I was wearing sweeping along the floor. And I swore, for a split second, that I heard Mochebun cry.

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9 thoughts on “The Lone One :: A Story [Prologue]”

  3. No page stretch, pl0x.

    Mochebun? XD That name makes me wanna laugh. Oh well. Anyway, very nice beginning so far, although I noticed you had a couple places in which you used the wrong word or punctuation mark. Other than that, it’s a superb job and I look forward to reading your future chapters. ^^

    And, zomg, this coming from someone who gets 20+ comments regarding chapter length himself, I could go for some longer chapters if you don’t mind, but it’s all up to you. Yes, that’s my only complaint so far. >.<

  5. AznRiceFan said: “No page stretch, pl0x.

    Mochebun? XD That name makes me wanna laugh. Oh well. Anyway, very nice beginning so far, although I noticed you had a couple places in which you used the wrong word or punctuation mark. Other than that, it’s a superb job and I look forward to reading your future chapters. ^^

    And, zomg, this coming from someone who gets 20+ comments regarding chapter length himself, I could go for some longer chapters if you don’t mind, but it’s all up to you. Yes, that’s my only complaint so far. >.<“

    I agree. And Mochebun looked like it sed Momo from PoT for some reason.

  7. There. Frontpaged.

    And I’m pretty sure it’s going to be romance, yes?
    And I ditto Rice on the Moche-dude. His name looks fit to be written thus: Mochebunnie bun-chan! XD

  8. lol i just combined Jpanese vowels. It was random . That’s what so good about the Japanese language.

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