ChaoticPeace- Prolouge
The blue-black night sky cuts into the silent world, casting dark shadows, that perhaps hides an evil grinning monster, lying in wait for a victim. Perhaps not. All is quiet in this small town. Even the wind is silent, not blowing upon the trees with their gentle breath. The shadows slowly shift around in rhythm with the moon. Slowly. Nothing stirs, not even mice. It is as if an enchantment is upon this place. But…no. There, behind the small mushroom house, some…thing moves ever so slightly, trying not to make much noise. It comes forth, and the soft moonlight reveals it to be a…..blue snail?! Thats not right…no monsters are able to get into towns, Grendal the magician had used Puyre Magyk to put an powerful rift that allowed no monsters to come in. So, why is this snail inside this town of mushroom?
~Nearby~
An Assasin adjusts his Dark Identity, moving into a more comfortable position atop the soft mushroom house. He makes no more noise than a waffle does, falling upon another lusciously delicious golden-brown waffle. His countenance is hidden in the dark shadows, as is his whole body, save for a green Osafa Boot, which blends in with the roof of the house. He watches the snail phlegmatically, musing to himself (he even muses quietly) It should be impossible for any monster to get in…unless the Prophecy is coming true… Grimly, he swiftly jumps up, throwing a lone ilbi at the snail while in mid-air, then lands on another rooftop, silent as a shadow. The snail dies without making a noise, so fast was the attack. The Assasin jumps from roof to roof, heading for the Emergency Headquarters in Ellinia. He breaks the darkness with an occasional Flash Jump, letting him climb yet higher into the night sky than he is. He soon disppears into the night, swallowed up by the soft landscape, which looks even ominus in the moonlight.
-Prolouge End
So how was it guys?
My first try at writing something like this…=D
Please klickey I liked it!
~Sashi
pretty good~!
Nice its intriguing
~kser4
Dude. Get the *BLEEP* out before you get flamed into ashes.
I’m not very attached to the RP, since I never saw it, but other people are. *shifts eyes around*
Especially if you post scenes with Aliyah and Guruji doin’ it. *shifts eyes around agian*
@Sashimi.
So you really WERE working on this. I told you that the title sounded contradictory to itself. >.<
Oh well, good story anyhow.
Okie, the guy is gone.
1. Don’t change your style of speech, don’t start formally and then switch to colloquiol. Start and end in the same mood.
2. After you write anything, you have to read it out loud to see if it flows, if it doesn’t, then reword it till it does. it works by reading it.
Overall, i really liked the distinctive descriptions, good job just have to fix those two errors up there.
– VanillaPocki –
Not bad. . . . write longer and more^^