Here it is!
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A van approached the warehouse. The van parked and two men got out. They headed toward the warehouse.
They knocked on the door.
“Password?”
“For christ sake Logan, just open the friggin door!”
the door opened and the two men walked in and approached a man strapped to a chair.
“You’ve caused us a lot of grief mister Suvarov. Now you will suffer for your actions.”
The man drew his serpants tongue.
“Carnage, destroy.” the spear turned into a snake and slithered onto the man. You knwow aht happens next.
6:12.45,46,47
6:24.56,57,58
Zack ran through Sleepywood with a pack of Lupins chasing after him. He drew his Lion’s Fang and jumped in the air. He casted Rage and started to dive.
“Die.”
Zack put his hand on the Lion’s Fang and it started to glow. It shortened and became a shinkita. He used savage blow at a speed non of us can comprehend. They all dropped like flys.
“Lil! I lost Bali! Patch me through to Lachell!”
“Got it Zack.” Lil said.
“Dessler.” “Lachell! I lost Bahi! Can you get me a satalite image?”
“Got it, I’m transfering it to your PDA.”
“Thanks!”
Zack ran into the ant Tunnel. He looked at his PDA. There was no image of the hostile.
“Lil, I lost him. I’m coming back to VCTU.”
“Copy that Zack.”
6:35.56,57,58,59
6:49.57,58,59
Zack Power. Lead agent in Victoria Counter Terrorist Unit. He was tracing a man involved with terrorist activity.
Zack returned to VCTU to be debriefed.
“Zack, Hali took the Ant Tunnel root into the cursed santuary.” Lil said.
“What’s my E.T.A if I go by drake?”
“10~15 minutes if you take the root through Ellinia, Zack, I don’t think you should do this.I’ll send Curtis.”
“Fine, I’ll go talk to Bill.”
=====MeanWhile=====
The man that was attacked by the spear was in wounds and bleeding like heck.
“Who else did you tell.”
“Screw you.” the man said. He got knocked out by someone bat.
6:59.58,59, 7:00.00
15 thoughts on “24:Maplestory edition”
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Too confusing, good try. Isn’t Curtis dead in the new season? I stopped watching it got too confusing.
Umm. Well.
You could do with more description, rather than a brief account of the skills they use etc. Even a movie script has more description than this. So, in short, it’s too skimpy for a story, but I guess that makes it easier to read for some.
No, I don’t know what happens next. Do /explain/! You are telling the story, right?
And keep in mind that there are people here who don’t know what on earth 24 is. I figure the strings of numbers are time-stamps? Use formatting to make it more obvious that they aren’t just random numbers, and maybe it’ll be better.
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You could do with more description, rather than a brief account of the skills they use etc. Even a movie script has more description than this. So, in short, it’s too skimpy for a story, but I guess that makes it easier to read for some.
No, I don’t know what happens next. Do /explain/! You are telling the story, right?
And keep in mind that there are people here who don’t know what on earth 24 is. I figure the strings of numbers are time-stamps? Use formatting to make it more obvious that they aren’t just random numbers, and maybe it’ll be better.”
SilverFx if you read his previous blog, which you had commented on, he mentioned 24 was his favourite TV show or something like that -_-
By the way why the /explain/ ?
But anyway I think the story is very unclear as well. You need to explain to us the significance of the numbers.
And TheCult, don’t try to steal Ganz’s trademark of liking every blog!
*shrugs* Well, a story is a story, I’m just pointing out the things I don’t understand about this particular one. I know it’s a TV show, and . . .? Is it like PowerPuff Girls? That’s a TV show too. >>
As for the explain. I really don’t know what happens next. >.> The snake hugs the man and gives him a kiss? ^^;
LMAO, Silver. You’re so cute! *ruffles hair*
NOT MY HAIR AGAIN! *flattens hurriedly*
Where is the cute part. . . o_O?
“The snake hugs the man and gives him a kiss?” YOU’RE SO KYUUUUUUUTE~ *ruffles haaaair!* =DD
Yeesh. I swore never to use that word; kyute. But you DESERVE IT! xD
PS: Phosphorus > Silver. =D I’m sorry Silver; you’re being deprioritized!
LAWL, it’s just /your/ imagination that makes it cute.
*gives up on tidying own hair and ruffles Ez’s viciously in revenge*
Pffbt, I don’t really want to be a priority on a pyromaniac’s list, if you get my drift. . .
I don’t care if mine’s mussed! It’s a nice short cut that makes it easy for rearranging! =D *jumps on Silver’s back for piggy back and RUFFLES!* <3
Butbutbut. I like lighting matches. ._. And matches = phosphorous > Ag & Helium & Lithium! =D Sorry Lithium; phosphorus is TEH SCHMEX. <333!
Uhh. . .Has become a spam area?
@SilverFx
No Silver I mean why the usage of / ?
That I don’t understand o.O
@Fenny
Be chary of this potentially hazardous blog. The last thing you want is to attract Annikabelle’s attention, or all hell will break lose.
@Devvy: the use of / is emphasising the word/s between the slashes. xD It’s just for people like me who’re too lazy to type out [ b ] [ / b ] etc. xD
@Devvy (^^): Oooh. Okay. It’s the lazy way of italicising/ emphasisizing something. 😛
Be chary of this potentially hazardous blog. The last thing you want is to attract Annikabelle’s attention, or all hell will break lose.”
Bah, Anni is not even on MSN. How can she be here? 😀