Ch.1 A Archer and A Mage
I look straight at the opposing pig as it readys itself to charge. I steadly lifted my bow getting ready to attack as I pull my arrow back the pig started to run towards me but it speed could not beat my aim I shot it down with one arrow. Befor I headed back I took out my knife and sliced off it head to take it back to henesys. As I walk towards the potion shop a voice came from the treehouse above me.
“Hey Rodney”
“Sup Kati” I shouted towards a young mage in the tree house.
“Ready to go?” Kati said as she jump down I wasn’t really watching her as she fall down over me.
“SPLAT!”
“Rodney! Where are you!?” Kati shouted as she looked around.
“Under you” I said laying under her bottom.
“Oh my god sorry Rodney!” She said as she rush to get off me. She place her hand forward to grab my hand she pulled me up and we laughed.
“Ya let go meet John” I said heading towards the potion shop. I looked up at the bright blue sky of henesys and wonder what it would be like if I could never see this beautiful sight ever again. After we got into the potion shop a Assassin was waiting for us.
“You guys are late” He said handing us a broom, a spong and a bucket filled with water.
“Now I want this potion shop spotless after I come back.” He told us as he headed out the door.
“Sigh…. Time to go to work” I said looking at Kati.
“Hehe Guess so” She said cheerfully. As I looked at her cheeful face a feeling grew from within me a urge to be with Kati forever. We have been friends for three years now I had a feeling what she would say.
“Kati…” I said quietly
“Hmm what is it?” She said looking at me with a confused expression.
“Will you go out with me?” I asked her bravly.
“…. well” She queitly whispered
DUN DUN DUN
ch 1 DONE
daaaaaaaaam datz short XD. i read it in like 10 seconds =P. Make it longer so i can have more fun reading.
I think the story needs better grammar.
As do I. “let go meet john” had me confused for a while. I thought they said “Let go! Now, meet my friend John”, which doesn’t really make sense.
This story is just plain messed up.
Number 1 fix you’re grammer!
Number 2 stop deleting and reposting this!
Getting so annoying!
Number 3 longer please. At least triple the size of it is now.
Number 4 just continue a story for once T.T
Seriously, stop deleting and reposting this!
And a girl jumps from some kind of a treehouse, lands on a boy, and she doesnt know where he is? -____-
Either the girl is so fat that she has no feeling in her ass, or she got anesthetic shots,
~Sashi
Splat?
You mean she crushed him like jello?
Why is he still alive?
And when she landed on him, she felt no pain? I mean if you jump from a tree, you expect to land on hard, flat land, but she lands on like, his head and she says “Where are you!?”
Lmao
And your cliff hanger is un cliff hangerish XD
I saw some punctuation errors. (I think.)
And I agree with Sashimi with your ‘cliff hanger’
you know that cliff hanger might not be what it seems also do you want me to continue on this story? or should I finish my WoW story?