Zombie Strike on Ossyria: Prologue

The spearman was fighting off the jr. grupins one by one. This spearman did not get tired from this mindless killing, and took all the goods he could get from the innocent little kitties. Around 10 yards from him, there was a pool of some unknown liquid. The spearman thought, “Heh, best to avoid something like that.” Little did he know how right he was. Suddenly, one of the jr. grupins that the spearman thought he had killed lunged at him, and bit his arm. The spearman flailed from such agonizing pain, and fell into the pool. The liquid went inside his arm, and the spearman noticed, so he rushed to the potion shop nearest him, in Ossyria. As he ran, he became drastically dizzy, and his speed became less constant. His hearbeat was fluctuating, and he tripped over a Nependeath root. The flower shot a seed directly at the back of his head, and he lost all consciousness, and lost the power to fight against the liquid…
The next day, the Ossyrian police force came to inspect a report of a dead body. Sam, the young chief of the PF began to announce the corpse’s features.
Sam:”Hmm, it looks like the body has a wound from a jr. grupin, but that surely can’t be the cause of death of a spearman, especially this one! Also, there is a blow from what appears to be from a nependeath seed to the head, but the spearman had a pretty good bone helm. It looks like the body has been here a week due to all the wrinkly skin, but it’s only been a day! This really is quite curious. Jessie, did you inform his guild?”
Jessie:”Yeah. He was a jr. master of his guild. They seem to be really upset over his death, and it looks like they want to catch the culprit. Hey, Jim, stop playing with the corpse!”
Jim:”Oh ok. It looks funny though…holy crap, did the head just move?”
Sam:”Seriously, stop it. It’s not funny”
Jim:”I’m serious!”
Jessie:”The head did move!”
The body of the spearman took out the zeco, and thrusted it into Jim’s ribcage
Jim:”Oh god…”
Sam and Jessie watch in horror, as the body bit off Jim’s ear.
Sam:”Jessie…we need to go! NOW! WE NEED TO GET BACKUP AND QUARINTINE THIS MONSTER!!”
Jessie begins to cry over the loss of Jim, as she and Sam run back to Ossyria, to warn everyone.
To be continued…

7 thoughts on “Zombie Strike on Ossyria: Prologue”

  1. The most important thing I noticed–

    Do NOT use colons in fanfics. They reduce the professionalism of your story. Write as if you’re writing a novel or something, that’s gonna be published.
    And use caps and punctuation more too.

  2. Look at Eden’s Prologue. His was really good. Oh and make it longer. At least two pages please. ANDDD Eden I did get 5+

    crazycat said: “Should I rewrite it?”

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