sucked into maplestory chapter 1

hello. since i hate my other sotries im gonna make a new one and if i quit it i wont make a new story >.>

it was a stormy day. the weather man said it wouldn’t rain. but what did he know? he makes too much bad predictions. he sighed and walked in his house. he had nothing to do. nothing was on TV. his little bro broke his play station. and he didn’t even know what happened to his Xbox. he went on his computer and surfed the web. but still, nothing to do. but, all of the sudden, his computer reseted. the TV. was still on. he didn’t lose power. then a beam came straight out of the computer. he started flying into the air. ohno, he thought, moms going to kill me! he then was sucked into his computer like a vacum cleaner. “what the..” he said. “DOWNLOADING COMPLETE” came a deep voice form no where. he looked around. gary, what have you done?” he thought to him self. he looked around, but he couldn’t see anything. it was pitch black. then there was a light. small, then big. it got bigger and bigger and bigger! then, the next thing he knew, he was falling from the sky. ” why does my life have too end here!” he yelled. once he fell on the ground, it didn’t hurt. he saw a number above his head. it said 10. it was blue. “hey you!” came a voice. he looked behind him and he saw a kid. he looked younger. and pixily. “yo, you look weird” said gary. “look whos talking” he said. he looked at himself. he looked simalir. “oh my gosh! what happened!” “did you get sucked into your computer?” the kid said. “uhh yes…” he said back. ” this is weird. everyone i ask keeps saying this. whos doing this??” he yelled.

to be continued….

4 thoughts on “sucked into maplestory chapter 1”

  1. Could have been longer, but I like how he was sucked into his computer ^^;
    Dont see many stories like that.

  2. Its like the matrix.
    Only with more chibi-ness.
    Some better punctuation and this story would shine.
    Keep ’em coming!

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