Pick up the pieces, chappii 5

“Wait here” Jake whispered into my ears, I looked into him, seeing such anger and determination together not to mention frustration. I nodded.

He started to run up to the three guys, on the way, it’s like he clapped his hands together, and pulled them apart, revealing that beautiful and powerful thorns.
He suddenly threw up something that looked like a piece in his training room. Ahhh, yes, the magic rock. It suddenly shattered like into a million pieces, then, from behind his back, it was like he summoned an angel!
He raised his thorns into the air, and the angel behind him clapped her hands together, and froze those 3 thiefs.
He then teleports back to me and puts his arm around me. I just blinked.
“That was fast.” I mumbled, he smiled at me.
“I think we’re finished here.” Jake said to the Dark Lord. The Dark Lord took a deep breath.
“For now you are!” He shouted, then he disappeared.
“C’mon, let’s go, there’s somewhere I want to take you.” He grabbed my hand and leaded me off.
When we finally managed to get out of that Dark Tunnel, I saw many dark trees.
Jake grabbed something from his pocket, it was like a small map. He looked at me, I don’t know why, but he kept smiling at me. Then, I could suddenly feel my body grow lighter.
My head started to hurt, it started to spin and spin. I felt so dizzy, then suddenly, I was in mid air, because I could even realise where I was, I started falling. Falling from the sky.
“AAAAAAHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!” I screamed, throwing my arms frantically around.
For what seemed like ages, I fell on some wooden log, and fell back onto a sail. Could this be where my journey began? I looked around, I wasn’t so certain, so I reached into my pocket for the world map. Blinking twice, and making sure, I looked at the compass, then I was certain, Yes, I was at Victoria Island.

“Jake??, J-Jake? Where are you?” I asked, look around, spinning into a circle.
I should first, get off this ship
I jumped off, and looked around.
“GOTCHA!” A voice from behind my back said and wrapped their hands around my eyes.
“Who is it?!??!?!” I said, terrified
“haha, me” he said.
“oh Jake, You scared me!” I turned around, laughing.
“Come! Come” He grabbed my hand, and lead me to another ship.
This strong looking guy blocked our way
“Where do you think you’re going?” He asked
Jake flashed a card in front of his face
“oh, sorry, here” He said
Jake lead me onto the ship, and we soon flew off.
“Where are we going?” I asked, looking outside, admiring the wonderful view from up high. Jake didn’t answer my question, instead, just asked me to wait.

I heard the Tooting of the ship, and figured that we were there. I was in such awe, this place was so beautiful. I could hear the wind gently blowing, while hearing the soft crashes of the waves. I could see those orange lorangs scurrying back into their holes, even felt one tickling me on my feet. I smelt the cleanness of the ocean, of the sea. The smell of nature it was!

Suddenly, I snapped out of my little daydream when Jake came, and brought me ice-cream sundaes!! In my favourite flavour, strawberry.
“Thank you” I smiled.
“It’s not a problem, but, well, this is really hard for me to say this, but-” Jake scratched his neck.
“Yes? What’s the matter?” I asked
“Well, I don’t know how to start this, I mean, You’re just a really sweet girl, and I , I, I want to be with you. Will you go out with me?” Jake finally managed to say.
I was shocked, no, but sad shocked, but excited shocked. I was just about to say YES YES, OFCOURSE, but we were once again, interrupted.
The ground trembled at the huge roar of a warrior. A dark knight to be specific.
“Ha ha, think you’ll leave me out on this?” The warrior laughed
“ahhh, my good friend, what brings you here?” Jake laughed
“Is this the girl you’ve been telling me about?” He asked
“yes, this is Sasha, Sasha, this is my best mate Timmy, people just call him Tim.” Jake introduced us two. I slightly blushed.
“Hey Tim, it’s nice to meet you.” I smiled, and Tim and I shook hands.
“Now, disappear Tim, Sasha was just about to answer an important question of mine” Jake laughed
“Oh, really, it’s okay if Tim stays.” I smiled “and to answer your question, ofcourse I’ll go out with you.”
I smiled.

Actually, going out with Jake wasn’t as I had planned. It was different, I mean, the first difference was that Tim was there. Not that it mattered, I like Tim, as a friend ofcourse. We just went to see a movie, and he offered to pay for lunch. I wanted it to be more romantic, but ahhh well, can’t get everything I wanted. TT

“Wow, it’s getting dark, should we go home?” I asked while I leaned on Jake’s shoulder.
“Ofcourse” he said, he leaned down and kissed me on the forehead.
“Well, I should get going then!” Tim said, and ran off.
“Cyaz” Jake said, and I just waved.

As we walked back, he held my hand, suddenly, an eagle, no wait, an owl, or was it just a small bird. Anyways, it came, and suddenly dropped a letter. Jake picked it up, it said.

Jake, please proceed to Magic Academy on the next ship tomorrow morning, something bad has happened.
We both looked at head other, Really, I was more worried than him.
“Want to come with me, or you want to stay here?” He asked, “it’s safer to stay here” He added
“Don’t think you can ditch me!” I pinched his nose “I’m definitely going with you” I smiled.

~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
This one’s probably my favourite, don’t ask me why. lol, anyways, hope you have enjoyed it!!

8 thoughts on “Pick up the pieces, chappii 5”

  1. you. . . have . . . . to. . . . get. . . . the. . . next. . . chappy . . in. . . . SOON. ASAP. But, I’m glad to see improvement in tense, still some minor mistakes though. Loving the story.~

  2. I’m guessing Shatred will be here to flame you. . .

    I bet my. . .ICE CREAM STICKS! 10 OF THEM!

  3. Fenrir said: “I’m guessing Shatred will be here to flame you. . .

    I bet my. . .ICE CREAM STICKS! 10 OF THEM!”

    Haha, I would do the grammar thing again, but since none of my suggestions show up in the next chapter. . .nah. Plus i have da tummy flu. T_T

  4. This reminds me of Harry Potter in some ways

    You’re improving, I’ll say that
    If you compare this to the first chapii, you’ve rlly made differences in your grammar and tenses.

    Keep it up

    __<3Rain

  5. @everyone: This is my story, Shatred, I can’t keep changing it when I don’t know what to change. Writing is harder than I thought, I admit, but sometimes, some compliments like rain would be nice you know.

  6. Shatred try not to criticise so much; authors respect their work a lot and even the smallest of flames could hurt someone’s feelings. The story is not really THAT bad to begin with; I do find the storyline quite engaging. Anyway although no one has commented on that yet; this storyline plot may seem a bit of a cliché, bout the heroic scenes and stuff, but at least its the simple and nice ones that people like XD.

    The original and simple plot of ‘Winners and Losers’ I had originally drafted was mutated so much by me in attempt to add twists that I don’t even know where the story is heading anymore. Or at least I didn’t know, now I know its heading nowhere.

Comments are closed.