The Flower Petal II

Brian and his new found guild was walking the streets of Kerning City. It has been almost 10 years and he is lvl 55 now being a fire/poison mage. His dreams of becoming a priest to help people left his mind. He just wanted power now to find Jackie.
“Brian come up front.” said David, the leader of the guild. Brian walked up to him “What do you want David?”
“Its come to my attention that you are always off during battles having other things on your mind.” Brian just looked away.
“So what are you saying, that im not worth being in the guild?”
“No im just pointing out that you should get your head in the right place and keep a straight mind.”
“Sure David. Anything for you.” Brian walked ahead to the potion store.
“Hello give me 150 white potions and 200 mana elixirs.”
“Ok young one” Brian sat down awaiting his potion. So many thoughts were running through his head.
He was thinking if he was to ever meet Jackie again.
*BAM*
The door slammed open and a girl fell in. Brian got up and looked at her. She had a deep wound in her side, gushing blood Brian grabbed one of his white potion and she drank it down. The wound started to heal up quickly. The girl looked up and looked at Brian. “Thank you very much. I appreciate it.”
“Oh it was nothing i can’t let someone die….” Brian helped her up. The girl put her hand out “My name is Cathy.”
Brian stared at her for awhile and said “Brian” They walked out together and he noticed her guild tag was called Petal dance. They said their goodbyes and left to their houses.

The next day Brian went to Henesys for his guild’s secret deal. Brian was thinking where was this guild that was supposed to bring the black sack. Then out of nowhere a Kumbi flew through the sky and hit someone of their guild. Everyone grabbed their weapons and was looking around. Brian saw someone’s head poking behind a rock and he teleported behind her and pointed his Thorns at her and said “Who are you and what guild do you belong to!” The person got up slowly and he noticed she was holding a Deadly Fin. “Who wants to know you pathetic noob.” Brian got enraged and used a Fire Arrow on her. It hit her in the center of her back and she flew to the ground. The girl was getting up, feeling waves after waves of pain. Brian teleported to her and screamed “Don’t you ever call me a noob! My guild RosesofBlood will kill you!!” The girl stayed on the ground, her face staring at the ground.
“You will really hurt me? When you said you will never hurt me, never let anything happen to me.” Brian was confused and then remembered Jackie and was staring at the girl. “Jackie its its really you??” Jackie looked up and said “Yes baby its me” Brian collasped on his knee and stared at her with watery eyes. Jackie turned around and saw her leader beckoning to her. “Sorry Brian” Jackie got up and toke out her Deadly Fin and used Savage Blow on him and hasted herself away. Brian fell down in deep pain and he was examining himself…..he had a critical wound. He was saying to himself “So this is how its going to end…..me dying after meeting my love” Brian looked up at the blue sky and he never appreciated anything that happened to him. A tear slid down his cheek and landed on the ground. Brian closed his eyes and slowly drifted off to where every he was going towards to. “BRIAN WHERE ARE YOU!!!” David found Brian on the ground and a pool of blood next to him. “OH MY GOD NOOOOO” David ran over to him and was crying……”Brian sorry ive been treating you so badly…….i just never wanted you to know that……we were brothers…..” David was sitting on his knees crying and then he laid his head on his head cradling him. “Sorry bro….i will get revenge for you…no matter what i will get the person that did this.”

The Funeral

The whole guild was there in black suits. David was standing tall and was crying still. The priest said the final blessings and Brian was put in his grave. “I made a promise to Brian. You all have to help me find those who were responsible.”
“Yes sir.” They all walked to the taxi and was planning on going to El Nath, the city of many stories.

6 thoughts on “The Flower Petal II”

  1. Zomg the paragraphs! =__=

    You changed the guild’s name. The first story, it was RoseandBlood. Now, it’s RoseofBlood.

    Also, why did Jackie do that? She’s meeeaaannnn!

  2. This chapter was, once again, too rushed.
    Too many events happened in a mere chapter. You need to add more detail to your stories.
    Also, like Fenrir said, more paragraphs are needed.

    But on the brighter side I can see a bit of improvement from your last chapter =P

  3. I actually enjoyed this chapter a lot more than the last, but you can learn from the people who posted above ^_^

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