Assassin Clan Part 1

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Well…I finally make a blog ^^
Remember: BE AS HARSH AS YOU LIKE! or Else!

Here Goes!

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Maple Island is a peaceful island where are adventure begins. Keitaro thinks that he is ready to adventure, but his mom said that he is still too young.

“Keitaro! Can you go to mart and buy me some vegetable?” she said.
“But mom! Why me!” Keitaro grumbled.
“Go or you will be grounded for a week!” She yelled.

As Keitaro walked to the mart, he passed some target practice (you know, the dart targets), he took a rock and throws it straight at the target.

“Very Good, Young man” says a stranger.
“Huh? Who’s there!” Keitaro yelled.
“I’m just looking for someone to become one of our member, the Assassin Clan” Says the Stranger.
“Hmm… I am looking for some adventure” Keitaro thought.
“If you’re interested, meet me at SouthPerry at Midnight” Says the stranger.
“All right” Says Keitaro while he thinks about what his mom said.

Later that night, after he bought the grocery, he writes a letter to his mom:

Dear Mom,

I’m looking for some adventure, don’t bother looking for me, I’m going to follow Dad’s footstep, becoming an Assassin.

Love, Keitaro

After he wrote the letter, he sneaks off while his mom is sleeping. As he walks to SouthPerry, he slashes some monster with a sword his dad gave him 3 years ago.

“Very good young one” Says the Stranger.
“Lets go, where do I become a member of the Assassin Clan?” Says Keitaro nervously.
“Go to this ship and go straight to Kerning City, take this 3000 gold’s so you can go there” Says the Stranger.

As Keitaro walks to the ship, he keeps thinking about his mom, his only family member…
To Be Continued

There… Please vote if you want this story to continue, if you want to continue, mind sharing some idea how to continue the story?

10 thoughts on “Assassin Clan Part 1”

  2. Just some grammer mistakes:

    Keitaro! Can you go to mart and buy me some vegetable?” She said
    “She” should not be capitalized.

    “If you’re interested, meet me at SouthPerry at Midnight” Says the stranger
    No period o.O
    And different tenses.

    For your plot:

    Maybe a bit too rushed. Try slowing down and describing more. That’s what I’m trying to do.

    BUT GOOD JOB WIL!

    ~Serena^_^
    Ps: read more if you wanna become a better writer.

  8. Some grammar mistakes, and conjugation is your friend. But other than that this is a good story so far.

  10. I love it! It’s extremely interesting. I can predict where the story’s going (who hasn’t heard of a story like this, no offense? =x), but it all sounds pretty good =D I like it.

    Good luck! Keep going! =D

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