XD sry bout the mistake in the first one. Ellinia not Ellinea man cant believe i was so stupid.
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Me: MUM!!! IM OLD ENOUGH I WANT TO GO NOW!!
Mum: Not till your old enough
Me: But you promised *half crying*
Mum: You never keep your promises. Your almost a man you need to keep your promises.
Me:Fine!
I run out of the house disapointed. How could she lie? She promised. Either way. Im going and no ones stopping me, Not even my mum.
I ran to the closest air station.
Me: Can i have a ticket please to Maple Island?
Ticketer: Im sorry, according to new laws on Air Travel, you need a partner or supervisor.
Me: Bu…
Ticketer: Im sorry
So this is what happens? My first chance of escape ruined by laws? I walk slowly back onto the road. Something caught my eye to the right of the station. A girl, crying. Someone my age, proberbly someone who lost something or something nothing of my concern, but then something remembered me of something “you need a partner…” Of course! I walk back up the hill. I went next to the girl in an effort to ask if she wanted to be my partner. Mabye it was fate we met, fate i became rich, fate i became famous, fate that i lost everything i had and once loved. But right now i didn’t know. I didn’t know that she was going to be my girlfrined, that she was going to be my saviour, that she was going to be my downfall.
I approached her.
Me: Hey, why are you crying
Her: The ticketer, he… *breaks of crying* I needed to meet my parents
Me: You going to Maple Island?
Her: Yea, cept i dont have a…. *lightening* will you be my partner
Me: *blushing* uhm.. sure….
Her: Great! *kisses me*
Me: ….. urm lets go?
We approach the tickter again.
Me: Hey i would like to purchase 2 tickets to Maple Island
Ticketer: Here you go 200 mesos please
Me: urm… *feeling in my pocket* uhh oh im sor…
Her: Here 200 mesos
I just stood wide eyed at the money she was handing. I tried to ask and she politly almost unrecognisably waved it off.
We get on the ship. I look around.
Me: We better get to the cabins
Her: Yea before the good ones are taken
Me: The good ones?
Her: Yea there are 3 types, First Class, Business Class and Economical Class
Me: urm… ok so lets get a first class?
Her: Lets go
And i swear i saw her blush or was it the setting sun?, but either way i could find feelings and concience telling me to ask her out, but then i remembered the money, she properbly comes from a royal or rich family. She’ll never be mine, never be mine to hold, never be mine to kiss, never be mine to love.
Good job on this.
I like the use of repetitions to emphasise a point. Well done.
I like it. (you may not know me but Im really honest)
I thought when i looked at the title, this wasn’t going to be so good, but once i started reading, it was excellent. you’ve expressed yourself well. *adds onto buddy*
I’ll be checking for more chapters.
Though i DO think the events are abit rushed. Just a thought to put under consideration. Awesome!
tnx ill try to make it a bit slower and less rushed i jst wanted to fit it in before the server check wen i got bak from skoool
Pretty nice. Just a bit too short