Yea this is the fight part.. Enjoy~HELP ME REACH FRONT PAGE,SUPPORT THE CAUSE,CLICK DA BUTTONPic 1) the attack that Anna shot out-pic 2) the atk that Sam shot out Pic 3) the character thats coming in next chap
15 MIN LATER
Anna: We gotta jet they keep coming in by the hundreds lets run deeper in the map-I need to tell you something anyways
Me: KK lead the way!
We quickly sack the henchmen in our pathway and jet for some covarage to escape for a while.. i wonder what does anna want to talk to me about?
Anna: Ok remember when i said you can use 2 classes cuz of your family blood and your will to be a mage?
Me: yea..
Anna: Before you think about it.. this can negativly effect your 2 classes and you have to meet the requirments 1) You must have the blood of another class
2)Almost no one in this world can master 2 classes so your class spilt will be cut in half.. 50% n you need STR/LUK/AND INT
3) However,if you decide to train your str more you will be stronger with warrior based attacks untill you class switch
4) You can fuse your 2 jobs sometimes-depends how strong you are.
“Enough chit chat ladies I’m sure you know your trapped” As soon as we heard that voice we knew it was Jack..But wait.. what happened to the henchmen?!
Me: Wheres your goons?
Jack: Oh you mean the dead bodies on top of us? They couldent even beat 2 simpltons like you so why use them?
Me: Monster!Were they not loyal to you?! Even if they were weak you dind’t have to slaughter them!
Crackle crakle~ That was the sound that came from Jack’s mithril wand.. But what was it? the sound was getting bigger… and bigger..
Anna: Nows our chance while hes charging for one attack we can pound him with 100!
Jack: You think I’m charging for one? This is enough for 100! And each time it hits you you will feel the wraith of 10 magic claws!Oh and I forgot .. MAGIC GUARD!(fairy comes out and gives me magic dust)
Me: Snap! Our attacks will barly hurt him what do we do?!
Anna: I got a plan but we have to run for now .. if were trapped.. we make a way(knocks down wall) Come on! Your about to learn your first cross class attack
We quickly run out of the portal and we end up at a bunch of trees filled with slime. I dindt know what plan Anna had but it had to be fast and furious or we would be hot and boiled.
Anna: Ok.. i want you to calm yourself down.. Now hold your wand .. but pretend its a blade …
Me: like this?
Anna: Yea now.. focus your magic at the tip of the wand/blade and when i count to 3 unleash all the magical powers stored at the tip and fire it!
Me: SHOULDENT I PRACTICE FIRST?!
Toolate. Jack already came with a face of a fiend and his mithril wand cracking at the enormous power he stored.
Jack: Oh? So you want to fight eh? What ever you got .. give it up cuz its over in 4 seconds
Anna: 1 … 3! SHOOT DAM IT
Me: You dindt say 2!
Jack started to charge it up and shot a ball that came out small… then big.. bigger.. REAL BIG as big as a boulder
and guess what we had? 4 puny attacks.. 1 lucky 7 and magic claw.. but wait.. Anna’s stars turned into energy bolts.. she was shooting energy bolts at lightning speed! I quickly turn to my magic claw and I see my attack turning into a magic claw but shifting into a sorta slash blast!
5 min later~ We won we won! Emm.. Jack.. lost.. we called the police and he got arrested but he died.. ( ARE WE GETTING SUED?!) and it was all over.. we got a citenzens award… and the night was over..
Sorry i had to rush xP
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The ending was bad. the rest was okay,
Okay, firstly, put detail into your story. No offence, but in terms of detail, your story sucked. At the end, you said ‘We won we won!” If I read it, it sounds SO bland. If you had put in something like, “I jumped around in glee, causing Anna to look at me like I was crazy as I shouted to the world, “We won! We won!” it would have been MUCH better, and it has more feeling than if you just type “We won we won!”.
Secondly, use proper grammer, for cripe’s sake! That includes punctuation and spelling and all that crud. Type it out in Microsoft Word or something that automatically corrects your spelling and sentence structure. It’s painful. >_>
Thirdly (this may only apply to me, I’m not sure about everyone else), the way you’ve set your story out. . .the way it keeps saying ‘me:____ Anna:_____’ irritates me. It’s not like a proper story. In books, you don’t see the writers setting it out in this format. Except if they’re plays, or whatever. And that is why I hated studying Romeo and Juliet/A Midsummer Night’s Dream.
Use the tips I gave you and your stories will be SO much better, I promise. Provided you use the advice well, that is. >_>
O_O , yea i kno if u saw my first chap i think it was 2x times better thats cuz , i typed this out like perfectly before and it got deleted O_o, so i lost the will to do a reapt of the second chap
kinda crappy but not as crappy as mine!
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