Ludibrium: 15:00 basil time:
Mushumonkey:What…where am..I?
Agent 1:QUITE! get up…what you are about to see later is completely classified.
Thing is you won’t remember any of this.
Omega Sector: 20:55 basil time:
Agent2:We have brought the new specimen.
Dr.Kim: Good…you may go make to security you have done your work here well done.
Agent 1:Yes Dr.Kim.
Dr.Kim: Okay everyone you are new specimen for project-zeta.
Dr.Kim:All of you shall turn into Barnard gray, all of you will not remember any of this all you will remember is to serve me and our leader Cheif Gray…all of you may step in one of the pods in front of you now.
Mushumonkey: (What did he say…this is insane.)
Dr.Kim:Agent marco how nice of you to join us you are you not doing at security.
Agent Marco: Dr.Kim your under arrest for illegal human mutations now come with me.
Dr.Kim: MUHAHAHAHA!!…you think only you may only you can defeat me and my army of Barnard Gray.
Agent Marco: Don’t worry Dr.Kim i have come with a guild…meet kogekisha, Noryoku, Spazzartist, and BerryYams.
Mushumonkey: GUYS!! 
its me mushu this guy is insane.
BerryYams: Yes we know Agent Marco has told us all about it.
(ZZZZZZZZZZAAAAAAAAAAAAAAPPPPPPPPPPPPPPPP!!!!!!!!!)
Mushumonkey: Guys…
Kogekisha: Mushu!!
Orbis: 17:99 basil time:
Mushumoney: What happened…
I feel like i was shocked by a stun gun.
Spazzartist: you sorta was zapped by Barnard Gray.
Mushumonkey: DR.KIM! what happened to him he’s insane.
Noryoku: We were able to run away from him when he brought out an army of MT-09.
Mushumonkey: Whats going on.
Agent Marco: I will tell you the whole story…
Omega Sector:19:99 basil time:
Dr.Kim: they got away no worry this will be all over soon.
short, dont make it like its a script, what the heck is it about and so on, !
Did you get permission to use Zerfox’s characters? Anyways, the plot is well, but the spelling and form isn’t significiant enough and too many mistakes.
read his ^ for a guideline
i know i was bored ill try to make the second chapter better
dont make the whole story
bob: blah
mike: u suck shut up
and yea
okay and about zerofox (kogekisha) i know him we are in the same guild.
and whats this have to do with mind wipe just trying 2 help
Ditto Mr J on everything but the title. I like titles that gain more meaning as the story goes on, so it’s okay if no one quite gets what your title means now, imo.
Still, do try to beef up your script thing. Even movie scripts have way more writing than that.
Kogekisha rings a bell.
Stupid title wiped meh mind. D:
fenrir did u get my mail of how i said i was gonna eatchu
Hey! Are you MushuMonkey?!
No god ain’t eatin’ me unless it’s Thor.
He’s our MS guild member, so that would explain how he got our names. I don’t recall him asking permission, but I don’t think Zerofox really minds. I don’t either.
Stupid title wiped meh mind. D:”
Kogekisha and Noryoku have been used in several fictions now, including Tales of the Twins by Zerofox and The Evil Grows by AzNxKnife.
Those names are also our (Zerofox and I) Maple IGNs.
I’m in the guild too!