When they woke up bird boy was better now and asanimeman89 said
”good your all better…now we can go places”
”good idea” says bird boy
”wanna go to ludi?” says asanimeman89
”yea sure” says bird boy
do yhey went to ludi [took a long time]
and finally when they got there there was a whole pack of mages running past.
”wonder wat their doing” says asanimeman89
yea me to” says bird boy
then they slowly started following the mages one turn around and said in a loud voice
” why are you following us? we are going to EOS tower. if you wanna die get moving!”
asanimeman89 said ”we better go lets see wats in there”
”yea sure right yeah” says bird boy
when they were in EOS tower bird boy was scared.But asanimeman89 was not scared he remembered this place
he used to train here!
asanimeman89 yelled out”hello!?”
bird boy was just about to say chirp….when a huge rock went tumbling down EOS tower!!!
asanimeman89 pulled out a rope and threw it on a ledge they hurried up the rope.
and the rock landed on the ground with a big ~[BANG]~
hey” says asanimeman89 that bang yesterday was just big bould…..
right when he was about to say boulders the boulder cracked open and out came a
ROMBOT asanimeman89 seen those before so he jusp on top of the rombot but the rombot hit him off.
bird boy was making a nest out of gollem blocks!
and asanimeman89 yelled”wait there are gollems around there!!!!!
what should i do?
Um, no offence, but when I read to the story, it reminded me of a children’s book.
I think you should stop this. . . storyline, and improve on a better one.
build up on some writing skills so many gramatical(sp?) errors
The story lack emotions, U need to used better words as well, As quoted by Kizuryuu, i agree with him
you guys suk,
what?! Are we suppose to say: “cool UR STORY ROX”?! We all have freedom of speech o_o
So take a chill pill dude
sorry,
Whoa, this is from 2006?! O_O