Dash Part 1

Omg everyone was leaving mean comments and it pissed me off and so then I got mad and I decided to give you all I got written so far so here you go, knock yourself out -.-

We decided that we shouldn’t go over it was to soon so instead Rachel, Crash, and I walked down to the market to look around. I had to go to the bathroom and searched around. Finally I spotted one out and I dashed over to it. Not looking where I was going I slammed right into a strong figure. Looking up saying sorry and regaining my balance I found myself getting lost in the same deep blue eyes. My heart started racing and I didn’t know what to do.

He took my hand and helped me make sure I was okay.
“S..o…r…r…y” I managed to mumble.
”It’s okay, are you alright?” He said with a strong voice.
“Yeah I think so” I said uncertain of what I was saying.
“What are you running from?”
“Running from? More like to and that would be the bathroom”
“I see I see well when you go in there mind telling Michelle to hurry up? She’s taking FOREVER in there.”
“Sure I’ll see you around I guess.”

I walked into the bathroom and found Michelle just walking out of the stall and told her that her brother was waiting for her outside. Then I quickly found myself a stall and took a quick little pee. I washed up and headed for the door. As I opened the door it smacked right into Mark’s face. He fell to the floor unconscious.

Oh no I thought Oh no! What was he going to think of me now?!?! I bumped into him and slammed a door in his face all in less then half an hour! His little sister came up trying to see if he was alright. I ran up to his side and told her to go get help from a gm FAST. I repeated the stuff my dad had taught me as I was little about healing, although I was not old enough to use it yet I thought maybe it might help him long enough for the gm’s to come.

4 thoughts on “Dash Part 1”

  1. Whee~

    Yeah. Generally (not trying to be mean here) people enjoy reading fics that are a full chapter long, rather than one paragraph, because then it tends to get choppy and hard to keep track of, if you get my meaning.

    And we’re not trying to hurt your feelings – rather, it’s that we, uh, want to give you suggestions. . ? To help you improve with your writing. Yeah. :3

  2. Yes,Yes great way to make him feel better,
    Heres the REAL deal, I DONT WANT YOU PUSHING DOWN MAH BLOGS! jk jk

  3. well that wasn’t even a full chapter so it was kinda pathetic I should just take it all down and re put it up when I’m done the full stupid chapter and like after that I dun even know when the second one gonna be up because I have so much other shiit to do and it’s hard to find time to write so sorry and all but I duno sorry about my language p.s. I might just take it all down and never put it up again, not alot of ppl seem to be enjoying it

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