Hello, this is my first “blog” on here. But this isnt actually a blog, this is a story about the game called “MapleStory”. I hope to make these into short stories that intertwine as a series of books. well here goes the story!
Chapter I : The Two Brothers
“Come on Falkner!” Zaluk shouted to his brother Falkner “We’ve got to get this sparkly thing to that man Yuta!”
“Hmph… those pigs are a nuicience and that isnt a sparkly thing, remember Camilla called it a glass marble” Falkner stated. “yea whatever, anyway we got to get this to him and… whoah!” Zaluk pretended to drop the glass marble. “Don’t drop that!” Falkner scolded “that’ll cost a fortune to repay in chores if we break it” “yes well we won’t get there any quicker if we stay talking here. And i’m sure the rest of the class would like to hear about you getting beaten up by a bunch of ribbon-pigs” Zaluk laughed with his brother and they went further into the mazes of Yuta’s pig farm.
“Were finally here!” Zaluk said as if no one else knew “we can finally get this to Yuta and get out of here” said Falkner back to his brother with relife, they had been here for a long time now, and were starting to get frustrated till the fount the correct path to Yuta. Suddenly a young man with a lot of farm equipment came out of the solitary house that was in the clearing in front of them. “Who are you two?” asked the man with a gloomy face. “Well we’ve came here to give Yuta this glass marble” said Zaluk. “Do you know where he is?” With those words, the mans face seemed to grow into a huge smile and he bellowed a laugh “that is me young lad! what have you come here fo… oh thats lovely” Yuta said enthusiasticly “that must be the present that Camille said she was sending to me. She must of been burdened down with her work and sent you two here.” Falkner just nodded his head, and Yuta took the marble from them. After this the two brothers turned round, Zaluk’s face looking hurt as is he thought a treat would be given. “Oh, i suppose i should give you something for your errand.” said Yuta and with that Zaluk turned around with a huge grin on his face. Yuta went into his house.
Yuta came back out again after a few minuetes looking a little dusty but still cheerful, and a book with a mud brown cover and a picture of a single pig on the front “Ask Camille if she would like this, and if she doesn’t you two can have it” Yuta said, and Falkner grabbed the book greedily, as if there was some sort of great information or secrets inside it. Zaluks face frowned a little, couldnt we have something a little more valuable then a silly book? he thought to himself. But as if reading his thoughts, Yuta then pulled out 2 cakes from behind him. “this is also for you, one each!” and Zaluk’s face brighted to his once again usually daft grin, and ignored the man and took both and scoffed his in one bite, then a few moments later, realizing Falkner was hoping to get his, Zaluk gave it him.
“now how will we get back?” asked Falkner, trying to remember the way him and his borther took and rewind it to get the way back, but Yuta just said a simple “when do you want to go back?” and Zaluk said “now would be good.” he next thing the two brother heard was a “back” and then nothing, but the place had suddenly turned cold for a moment then went back hot again, like they were in a oven and someone had thrown more coal into it. They only realised that they were back to the entrance of the farm when they started to climb down the ladder which led to the floor,which led to Heneys.
Chapter II: Banished Swordsman
“Get your hands off of me!” bellowoed Araknor to the guard that had him restricted. “You know to damned well that i didn’t do these acts!” “of course you didn’t sir” sneered the guard that restricted him. “You know I didn’t kill any of those men!” he shouted again in protest. “Maybe you didn’t kill the men, but we know to right that you raped all those women” said the man with glee, almost sounding glad as if had gotten away with it and had got the blame on this man. Araknor just mumbled after this, realizing that any further remarks might send him to a worse fate then he was at already, if there was any. He just turned away and looked at the other guard. The person who used to be his childhood friend. “I’m sorry” he said, reading his mournful eyes, “but this is out of my hands” He gave Araknor a saddend attepmt of trying to perk him up wth a hand on the shoulder. “Theres nothing i can do” The attempt at helping him didn’t help, Araknor said in his mind, he just remembered one thought, his own freind was banashing him from the pround city’s of Perion to the thugs citys of Kerning.
Chapter III: A Mages Dream
What has been happening to me? Falir thought, what are these maddend dreams? and why is it always the same one? The mage had just relived his bladder onto his bed that night, making it the third time this week. But it wasn’t his own waste that drenched him or his bed, but his sweat more than anything. He was astounded that this was happenin to him, he thought of it as nothing more that happens to a mage that his teachers just fogot to mention. He kept getting the same resounding images, ones telling him to go to the great tree, or as others called SleepyWood. They told him this silently, but the silence almost sounded like a noise itself. Then Horrers that he could never remember in the dream woke him and often left him in a lot of sweat and a empty bladder. “This has gone on long enough.” he promesed himself quietly, he would go to the great tree tomorrow. It wasn’t good to prance around Ellinia at night.
Chapter IV : Unkown Meeting:
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this is my first time. anyone who reads this and post comment, i would love to hear them and if you liked it. E-Mail me at hello50@ntlworld,com if you would like to play a part in this story, and i’ll TRY to fit you in. i Know this seemed a little boring, but i promise it will get more exiting later on. And please don’t tell me it had to much writing, its supposed to be a STORY. STORIES HAVE LOTS OF WRITING!!!!
I’d give it 5/10.
I think you should make the story slightly shorter with more paragraphs.
My advice for writing is this:
You must have entustasism for writing, so u get motivated. Its hard to do something if u don’t really want to do it