Frozen Tears Of Pain…. Part 1

I gazed out of the window to a field of pure white snow as my dad spoke to me,
“Jay….. i must tell you something and this is important….”
“what is it dad?”
“you know how ur sister went out into the snow one day and never returned?”
“ya sure…. that was the day u said she went to stay at her friends”
“well we just had a report a number of children where beign snatched by yetis.. and i think ur sister is in deep trouble”
*Fist clentching as the frustration flow’d through my vains*
“I will find her”
Grabing all my gear i headed to the copper plate’d door and hastely open’d it.
“Goodbye dad if i dont return just remmember that ur the best any son could ask for”
stumbling into the cold frosted snow i tredded onwards knowing if i dident succssed my sister would be lost forever.
While climbing the frosted over stone steps i tripped over a object covered in snow like the iceing on a ring donut,
“Huh! w-whats this”
i stopped for a minute and with my cold shudderign fingers felt the object, suddenly a burst of flame’s surrounded me as i gasp’d for air, wielding this magical staff i made my way higher and higher, steeper and steeper up the cliffs face a sudden jolt of fear stun down my spine like electrisity flowing through a wire,a loud RAWR!! came from a mountions cave, i enter’d the domain of the beast bone’s laying everywhere and blood spew’d accross the floor
with my frostbite’d lips i still manage’d to make a joke
“Looks like he likes his take aways”
I enter’d the cave deeper what would lie for me in the inner most deepest cave?
Well ull just have to wait till i make the next part xD hope u enjoy my story’s
DragonFang~~

6 thoughts on “Frozen Tears Of Pain…. Part 1”

  1. Interesting. Just make sure you don’t use internet speak like ‘ur’ and capitalize your ‘I’s when talking about yourself.

    Good start!

    ~Mip

  2. yups, try not using “IMing talk” when writing stories. =] I liek the story line though

  3. Lol bad grammer, wonderful storyline.
    I like it, a lot
    I’m looking forward for the next chapter.

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