Legendary Snail Part 1

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Squish Squish…. Squish Squish….

“Mom, when are we getting to visit uncle Mushry?” said the Suaka, the green snail.
“Just be patient honey, we will get there soon!” said his mother, a blue snail.
As they were walking, they said hi to many of the passing snails and shrooms as they knew most of them. Suddenly, a shroom popped out of a bush, obviously from the other side, and started yelling, “zomgz0rs!! BEGinbner allert la!!1111oneoneone!!!1” Every snail and shroom began to run away, but the beginner quickly advanced on them. Bzinggg.. Crack. Chiiiing! Suaka was to afraid to look up, but abruptly, the sounds stopped. The beginner had leveled up and traveled to amherst. “Phew, mom, that was close!” Suaka sighed with relief. After looking around, his voice crumbled into a panic. “MOM!!” Suaka saw his mother, cracked shell and all, dead among the slightly wilting flowers, along with some other corpses of shrooms. “NOOOOOOOO!!!” Suaka yelled in agony. “I WILL AVENGE MY MOTHER AND KILL ALL BEGINNERS!” Slowly, without his knowing, a darkness in his heart had appeared……

rate 1-10 please be as harsh as you want

15 thoughts on “Legendary Snail Part 1”

  1. its sall rite bout a 6/10 because its not original alot of pplz do the “zcool a beginner killed my friend/mother/ etc etc, I WILL AVENGE THEM!” and stuff. so ya, good night x3

  3. Eh. Try a little harder and become a little more original and you will get better ratings. Well just a little harder. You’ve got a good but common start but it would be interesting if the story turns out muchly different from what we all expect the story to be.

  4. LOL nice idea! I’l give it a 7/10. Some of the stuff you wrote we’ve all heard in corny movies and stuff. I still like it though 😉 keep it up!

  6. im scared, if i ever see another green snail, ill bow down and beg for forgivenes

  8. “thieve545 : im scared, if i ever see another green snail, ill bow down and beg for forgivenes”

    Lol, nice. i will fllow suit

    ~Leon~

  10. Hey, snails befriend orange mushy, orange mushy calls on mushmom, mushmom gives stuff to player, player help kill noobs.

  13. not very original
    the idea was, though.
    , but the comments said nobody liked it,
    why was this on front page with so little people liking it?
    6/10

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