Grendal Pt. II
Laboured, two months pass, climaxed with compliments of broken promises and tarnished hope. My observations yielded no vindication for the drunken babble of happy times, nor for the prudence of rain and fair weather makers rituals. My disappointment radiates with deep vex and exasperation. I now find, finally and absolutely, these men to be as ignorant as the ones that share my watery hell.
And so I shall show them the errors of their ways. I shall share with them the pains of this world, the pains that I, myself, feel. I shall make perfectly clear the pain that the worship of a handful of dust manifests. I find no prudence in the ideas that they worship; and thus, I will put an end to the grotesque nature of these humans. I will kill them all. Only then will they realize the pain of this world. Only then will they understand this world.
Shorter than the last one but okay. Why is hell watery though? I thought it would be like a burning inferno with scorching temperatures and people begging for ice water.
~Cheezy
Its too short!
>=O LONGER!
Good, but a little too short >_<
Sick.
Too many adjectives; like you’re trying too hard, so I can’t get into it at all.
Sorry.
~Mip
(Now that I take a closer look, what the HECK does this have to do with an MMO? Edit pl0x.)
First of all, this is was an assignment for school. That is why it is so short — I didn’t add anything to my original (I plan on it, however).
This story is based off the story Beowulf, which is most notably, in this instance, about pagans (the belief in many Gods). Because of this, there are many allusions (references to other literary works) to T. S. Eliot. The basis of my interpretation of Grendal is based off The Hollow Men by this poet. Anything that you don’t understand will most likely be because you have not read either Beowulf or the Hollow men.
To address the watery hell thing: you have to have read Beowulf to get that.
To address Mip: this is actually very thin. Read “Heart of Darkness,” them most dense thing ever written (and consequently, the most difficult thing ever written) and then tell me if there are too many adjectives in this one.
Give me a couple days, and I should have the next story up.
x: Okay, Broken, I’m afraid I’m gonna have to delete this. This has NOTHING to do with an MMO. I’ll give you a day to save it delete it yourself, otherwise I’ll delete it and it’ll give you a one day warning ban.
Thanks.
~Mip
Thanks.
~Mip”
Aw Mip, you don’t seem to be so harsh on other stories and such. >_<
Because they have something to do with an MMO, Epic. xD This has nothing, in-any-way, what so ever, have ANYTHING to do with an MMO.
~Mip
Thanks.
~Mip”
Aw Mip, you don’t seem to be so harsh on other stories and such. >_<“
no offense aimed at you specifically epic
but why doesn’t anyone let the woman do her job
always quick to pull up some excuse or some other crap
we all know Mip wouldnt just pick on us
she has a reason for the things that she does
let her do it
Not and excuse, just defense. I rest my case.
but there is no true defense because she’s right 98% of the time
your “defenses” and “arguments” amount to excuses
Like I don’t have it save T_T. I agree with you 100%! You should delete this and give me the one day ban.
I just hope it is not because you hate my plethora of adjective xD. That would be no fun. I think my story lost interest after the first part. And no one here would understand the allusions if I tried to continue it anyway. So there is no reason for me to even continue it. Oh well, at least my teacher loved it xD.