She set my heart on fire. (Poem)

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I can’t get her out of my mind…
I can’t ever deny,
The truth that avoids all eye.
Oh,
I have found
So many wonderous things…
Now why can’t you understand
My simple curiousity?
I have no idea why
You sat there in the darkness.

You cried,
While I stood there helpless.
I tried,
I always feel restless.
The pain,
That will never go away
From my lonesome heart
As it aches
In the endless river,
Aflame.

((Another poem I found on my desk, I fixed some errors -_-; Comments always appreciated!!))

15 thoughts on “She set my heart on fire. (Poem)”

  2. Poems don’t have to rhyme at all. . . and this poem did rhyme , just not a lot

  3. Luna, for your information it doesn’t suck and it doesn’t rhyme because it’s a free-verse poem you insignificant story writer.

  4. Wut mist said. If all poems had to rhyme, many famous poems would not be in exestence.

  6. Oh cool poem o_0 no really. I actually understood this one unlike the school ones -_-

  7. Misthokage, I agree with you, but please don’t call others “insignificant story writers” it really kills self-esteem. I know he was being mean too, and luna, do not give such negative comments it kills confidence!
    It’s a really nice poem, even without the rhymes, nice choice of words, and best of all – it flows ^^BUT, i think this poem still has space to improve, and you probably know what it is ^^
    P.S. I kno, i sound like your teacher trying to tell you this tell you to do that, yadayada
    P.P.S. Looking forward to your next poem
    I hope this isn’t really how you feel, because if it was, you need a really big hug, but then again, all poems are expressing the poets emotions and thoughts, so you need a hug! >: ) *hugs*

    – VanillaPocki –

  8. I think it’s just heart burn, Airwolfe.
    I recommend Tums or pepto-bismol.

    Nice poem btw.

  9. My heart is feeling the same way, in a way thanks you just expressed my feelings for a girl in my classs, *sigh*

  11. Err, Nice poem. Luna, You really do not appreciate good poems when u see 1. It dosen’t have to rhyme. Haven’t a deep meaning is just as enough. If you like to criticize people like that, why don’t you write your own poem and people criticize you. How will you like it? ariwolfe, don’t listen to her. Your poem is really good ^^ 9.5/10

  12. Err, Nice poem. Luna, You really do not appreciate good poems when u see 1. It dosen’t have to rhyme. Haven’t a deep meaning is just as enough. If you like to criticize people like that, why don’t you write your own poem and people criticize you. How will you like it? ariwolfe, don’t listen to her. Your poem is really good ^^ 9.5/10

  13. Err, Nice poem. Luna, You really do not appreciate good poems when u see 1. It dosen’t have to rhyme. Haven’t a deep meaning is just as enough. If you like to criticize people like that, why don’t you write your own poem and people criticize you. How will you like it? ariwolfe, don’t listen to her. Your poem is really good ^^ 9.5/10

  14. O.O, your computer must have been lagging XD Oh well,ya, I read it once and I still think next time you can get that other 0.5!

    – VanillaPocki –

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