As some of you might know someone kind of copied my idea. Then I got mad and made a blog about it. Yeah, about that blog. I re read it and it sounded pretty stupid so I deleted it. I guess I was just so mad. Well anyways I just wanted to say that it was pretty stupid of me writing that. But still please don’t steal other people’s ideas. That goes for everybody. So here’s 909
I walked out of the boat with Dan. Of course, it was just as I expected. Everything was in bright colors and there were tons of fairies. It looked like a good place to get some equipment so Dan and I took a look around town. Turns out I bought a blood slain and a few tobis. I even sold my old mokbis and kumbis. Talk about business. And it looked like Dan got a new Olympus.
“Man it just doesn’t make sense. I mean how could I do a 3rd job move when I haven’t even mastered the 2nd job?” I kept on ranting.
“Hey if I were you, I would be happy that I did it.” Dan replied.
“Easy for you to say” I mumbled. We walked back to the temporary school grounds and found that we were going to train on some stupid cat. We had to choose partners and of course I was walking to Dan, but then someone grabbed my arm. I turned around and saw Jenny.
“Need something?” I asked.
“Can you be my partner?” She asked shyly.
“I, um,” I looked over to Dan and he nodded. “Sure!”
When we arrived at the kitties I was pretty sure I could take them. I threw a steelie at one (without making it turn into a huge star) and it died fairly quickly.
“Oh these aren’t the one we’re training on Mr. Toshiro.” I looked around and saw the teacher staring at me. So we kept on walking until we came to bigger cats.
“So what, we’re just going to take on fatter cats? This should be easy!” I said.
“Then why don’t you take one on, Toshiro.” The professor said.
I jumped down and threw a couple of steelies at a blue cat. It dodged them and tackled me. I fell down on the ground. I grunted and used a lucky seven on the cat. They hit it, but the cat got madder. Just then there was a blue light coming from its horn. It let go of the energy and it was headed straight towards me. I wasn’t thinking and just braced myself. I got blown away and I got scraped on my knee.
“Ok that’s it you’re going down kitty!” I yelled. I grabbed a tobi and and started to focus my energy.
“Toshiro, that’s enough. I forbid you to use that move during this training time. Besides you’ll run out of energy that way and you’ll get an E. (Remember that MAPLE grades?)
I saw Rory snickering in the back. I shrugged and jumped back onto the platform with the others.
“Ok does anyone know what these are called?” The teacher looked around. Jenny raised her hand.
“Aren’t they called Grupins or something?” she said. The teacher nodded.
“So I want to grab your partner and get me 10 Grupin tails” He instructed.
Jenny was running over to me when Richard grabbed her. I sighed and went over to both of them.
“Hey cutie, be my partner will you?” Richard tried to plant a kiss on her cheek.
“I’m… I’m already with Toshiro so back off!” She yelled.
“Hey Richard, you should be able to take them on yourself. Your body weight should absorb the blow.” I grinned.
“Why you little…” Richard gave me a shove.
“You know, I would love to beat you up, but I don’t have time for this” I took Jenny’s hand and led her to the Grupins. I looked at Jenny and she was blushing, hard.
“What’s wrong?” I asked. She looked down and I saw that I was holding her hand. “Oh geez!” I quickly pulled it back. She laughed and started casting holy arrow at one. I kept on staring at her face and I completely forgot about everything else.
“Um, a little help, Toshiro?” she giggled.
“Huh, oh yeah, sorry.” I started throwing my tobis at the grupin. Once again, I got blown away. But then a green light surrounded me and saw Jenny healing me.
“Hey I have an idea, why don’t I just attack and you heal. That way we can get 10 tails easily.” I told her.
“Ok then” she nodded. So I started throwing lucky sevens at the Grupins face with a green light surrounding me for the whole time. We were the first to get 10 tails and we turned them in. Suddenly, Jenny dropped to the floor. I picked her up.
“Hey Toshiro, do you have any blue potions?” she asked weakly. I started looking all over my bag and finally found my blue potions. I started feeding Jenny like a baby and didn’t notice Dan and Maria watching. They started to laugh and I turned and gave them a mean look. They stopped and Jenny got her energy back.
“Ok you two, I’m going to give you these scrolls to go to El Nath. Get all your stuff and go to the inn there.” He gave us scrolls with a green string tied to it. We waited up for Dan and Maria and started racing towards are dorms. I grabbed all my clothes and my snow stuff, and raced back down. Maria and Jenny were already there. Dan finally came down and we ran towards the tower. We looked around and saw a big floating rock. I got my scroll untied the string and threw it at the rock. Suddenly I was spinning faster and faster, ready to throw up, but holding it back. I saw Jenny and Dan coming down too. Then Maria was spinning down. Then, all in 1 second, there was a cold gentle breeze and snow hitting my face.
Remember hit “I liked this blog” if you did. And I hope you did like this chapter. Next one would be… actually I don’t really know where I’m going with the next one. Soooooo it might take a while -_- Sorry
Nice interesting story ^^
Things to improve:
1. Proof read, a couple of mistakes, words that sound the same but have different meanings. eg ” He gave us scrolls with a green string tied to it. We waited up for Dan and Maria and started racing towards are dorms.” it’s “our” not “are”.
2. Choice of words are very important in a story, expand your choice in vocabulary. eg: “They hit it, but the cat got madder.” instead of the word “madder” you could have said – “They hit it, but the cat became furious this time” etc so on and so forth.
You have a very creative mind, just fix these things up and you’ll be even better! ^^
~ Looking forward to your next Chapter ~
– VanillaPocki –
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o_O how do you delete blogs?
Hmm no offence but I didn’t really like this chapter but I loved the others ^_^. It’s just probably because this one didn’t have enough action. . .
Nice, story, you did it again (I think, though other have some constructive critisism (I spell like. . . bad) )
Anyway, try to get some creative ideas, and wait the ekstra day, instead of making the story a endless chapter of boredom, which will happen, if you don’t get the time to be creative!
They could eventually go to meet the third job instructor, to get a knowlegde why he knew how to cast avenger *hint hint*
Okay, it’s your story, so I wont say anymore 0_~
‘*EverydayHero*’
is madder even a word?
yes it is madder is a word but angrier would be better
sorry for the double post but i have to say that these stories are better than your previous series
I Wish I Could Watch Your Stories EVERYDAY, I REally Like Your Stories They Make Me Turn VERY Calm~!-.- Anyways Keep Up The Good Wrok~!10/10
great job, but will the next one be 10010?o.0?